可以請各位大大給我的CV和cover letter一些建議嗎 - 大陸工作

各位大大好
之前在板上曾經PO過文 也得到了很多寶貴的建議
因為覺得台灣機會真的好少
所以想加入大陸暑期實習大軍的行列
雖然我沒有任何五百強，諮詢，或投行的經歷
但我很努力的想讓自己差異化
我有電機與企管的跨領域背景，有電腦業、出版業、獵頭、銀行
等跨產業的實習機會、也有台北、上海、孟買等三地的海外實習經驗
今天打電話去上海問了，他們歡迎台灣人投簡歷過去
這算是我第一次海投大陸的暑期實習吧，非常的緊張
所以希望各位在大陸的大大可以幫我看一下
我的CV和cover letter，謝謝

Dear Human Resource Administrator,

Please allow me to introduce myself as XXX, an applicant for the summer intern
in the Greater China offices of Bain & Company. I learned of the opportunity
through the BBS, and feel my qualifications are a good match for the
responsibilities of the position.

As you can see from my resume, I had data collecting, data analysis, and
interviewing experience both at Idobro, a marketing firm based in Mumbai,
and Bank of Communications. As marketing intern for Idobro, I was responsible
for customer profiling. I interviewed 20 Idobro's customers and did the survey
. I also analyzed the data through SPSS software and presented the findings to
my Indian boss. As personal banking intern for Bank of Communications, I
collected the data of competitors and consumers. I also interviewed the
account managers at different sub-branches of Bank of Communications and
presented a fund market report to personal banking team.

In addition to my overseas internship experience in Taipei, Shanghai, and
Mumbai, I have both engineering and business backgrounds. I also have
worked as an intern in 5 different industries in the past six years including
consumer electronics industry, publishing industry, headhunting industry,
financial sector, and social sector.

As a result of these experiences, I am confident I can be of value to your
company. Please feel free to contact me. There is no problem for me to have
an interview in Shanghai. I look forward to hearing from you soon.


Education
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National Chengchi University
Candidate for MBA, June 2011, GPA: 4.0, Taiwan 2009.9-2011.6
National Chiao Tung University,
B.S in Electrical and Control Engineering, GPA: 3.7, Taiwan 2004.9-2008.6

Work Experience
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Idobro Media and Marketing Services Ltd.,
Marketing Intern Mumbai, India 2010.1-2010.3
*Coordinated the project of member profiling in which I visited 20 members
of Idobro in 3 weeks and did the survey
*Analyzed the survey through the use of SPSS software and accomplished a
customer analysis report
*Assisted an Idobro's member in exporting mushrooms to Taiwan and China
including collecting Chinese importers' contact information and sending
sales letters to them

Ping An Bank,
Retail Banking Intern　Shanghai, China 2009.8-2009.9
*Elected as a 4-individual team leader and set up the weekly sales goal
*Sold 50 debit cards, 15 credit cards, and generated over RMB 400,000 deposits
through cross-selling
*Organized 3 community marketing activities and built relationships with
nearby stores, resulting in the increase of two new accounts

Bank of Communications,
Personal Banking Summer Intern Shanghai, China 2009.7-2009.8
*Acted as a team leader and led 5 interns to conduct a Chinese fund market
research
*Completed a report including the analysis of market, competitors, and
consumers through the use of field investigation, interviews, and surveys
*Presented a sales process improvement proposal and the suggestion was adopted by senior managers

ASUSTeK Computer Inc.,
Campus Executive Officer Taipei, Taiwan 2005.6-2006.6
*Organized over 5 campus activities and over 300 students attended the
campus speeches, 500 computers was sold through the campus group purchase
project

Project Experience 　　　　　　　　　
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LOREAL Taiwan,
Campus Project Manager Sinjhu, Taiwan　2005.9-2005.11
*Acted as a AIESEC & LOREAL campus project manager, led 4 people to
coordinate marketing activities in NCTU to promote Loreal E-Strat competition
which results a 57% increase in enrollments

Extracurricular Activities 　　　　　　　　　　　　　
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AIESEC
CTLC local committee, Vice President of Finance, 2004.9-2007.6
*Managed a budget of 50,000 NT dollars and improved the process of payment
from 45 days to 30 days

Toastmaster Club, Citi Bank local committee 2009.9-present
*Delivered two English public speeches and influenced one person to
join the club



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