可以幫我看開發信的內容嗎? - 國貿工作討論

※ 引述《Namine (macbook)》之銘言：
: Dear Mr./(or Ms.) XXXX,
: Good day! How are you?
: We obtained your company information from Overseas Office Republic of China
: (Taiwan). After we viewed your office website we know your company is
: operating as wholesale distributor of quality textiles for over 40 years in
: United States and have been importing variety kinds of textiles product from
: worldwide. We found website doesn’t show that your company do importing
: fabric from Taiwan, so we are writing to inquire if there is opportunity for
: establish business relationship with your company.

We got your name from Overseas Official Republic of China (Taiwan) and learned
that you are one of the leading importers of various textiles products, which
have been the main export items of our company during the past 35 years.

: We, XXXXXXXXXXXXXXX(公司名) was established in 1968 who have over 35 years
: experience in sourcing, manufacturing and exporting Taiwan textile products
: to worldwide customers and our customers are from among apparel, household
: industries. We help our customers develop Taiwan fabric what with excellent
: quality and realistic price. We can provide fabrics made of man made fiber in
: both woven and knitted and proceeding many kinds of finishes in compliance
: with customer’s need, such like W/R, W/P, Coating and so on, if you are
: interested with importing fabric from Taiwan, please don’t hesitate to
: contact with us for further discussing.

We are a corporation specializing in sourcing, manufacturing and exporting
Taiwan textile products to worldwide. We provide artifical-fiber fabrics with
which excellent quality and reasonale prices will be satisfactorily to
undertake any olders from you.


: Thank you for your time for viewing our E mail, and look forward to your
: early reply.

We thank you in advance for your kind attention and look forward to establish-
ing business relationship with you in the near future and hope to receive your
early reply.

: Sincerely yours.
: XXXXX XXXX(人名)
: 可以請大家幫我看看有什麼需要改進或潤飾的嗎?我之前都是一直用一個格式狂寄開發信
: 但成效不章，所以我打算很認真的看要開發的客戶的資料，再依他們的資料各別打信件
: 看看這樣回覆率會不會高一點?但其實我的英文能力並沒有很好，所以擔心會寫的很死版
: 希望各位版友能夠撥冗幫我看看，謝謝!!

以上小弟簡略修改，如果貴公司還有目錄的話可再補充說明。國貿新手請多指教Orz....

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