開發信求批 - 國貿工作討論

各位板上大大好,

小弟的BOSS因為最近公司業績下滑,要我們多開發客戶.

擬好的開發信如下,請各位大大不吝指點!

Dear Sir,
hello, good day! I’m Alex, from XXX Corporation in Taiwan.
I just visited your website and found that you are manufacturing (monitor and
other related products此處為客戶應用端產品名稱).
And we believe you might be interested in our products.

XXX Corporation is one of the leading thermal solution company in Taiwan.
We’ve devoted ourselves to providing high quality product in this field for
almost 20 years.
XXX(公司名稱) can offer you not only customized fan but also various processing of
heat sink.
For example, extrusion, die-casting, skiving and forge… etc. Besides,
different specification of fans are always available for you.
You’re kindly invited to visit our website as (公司網站).
Please just feel free to tell us your demand quantity also along with the
drawing for your wished product, then we will quote you the most competitive
price for you.

We’re looking forward to hearing from you soon and establishing business
relationship with you. Thank you.

有爬過文,前輩們指示內容篇幅盡量簡短,並且表明能提供的服務,以及尋求客戶回饋.
不知這樣是否有符合? 還請大大們鞭一下小弟,這樣我才會進步阿!

若有相似產業的大大們,也歡迎多多指點小弟,讓我能有學習/請益的機會.
無論是推文/回文/站內信的方式都好.

小弟萬分感謝呀!

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