初學翻譯急救 - 翻譯

各位版大,最近正自學翻譯,實在很痛苦,需要幫助,

以下是我是翻的句子,需要修改,有無版友提供意見

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(1)渾疑碧落銀漢,灑落繁星萬點。繞遍十里方堤路,錦花如帶望無邊。
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Wandering what is falling is the milky way,

Spreading numerous flashing stars.

Detouring a ten-mile fragrant bank road,

Brocaded flowers like girdles view cosmically/illimitably

(2) It serves always to distract the public councils,

and enfeeble the public administrations. It agitates the community

with ill-founded jealousies and false alarms, kindles the animosity

of one part against another, foments occasionally riot and insurrection.

It opens the door to foreign influence and corruption, which find a

facilitated access to the government itself through the channels of party

passions. Thus the policy and the will of one country are subjected to the

policy and will of another.
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這項政策分散了公共議會的權力，削弱了公共行政體系。卻利用不正當的嫉妒與謬誤的

恐慌來鼓動公眾並挑起相互間的仇恨及偶發的騷動與起義。同時也為外來的影響及貪腐

敞開大門，透過黨派熱衷的管道尋求一個對政府本身有利途徑。如此，政策與各國

間將會相互制衡。

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